Naiden of the flower ( complete)

-General Info-

-Zanpakuto Name: Asagao

-Family: Nature/plants

-Type: Defense
-Sealed Description:https://media.photobucket.com/image/katana/fbusmc/SANY2142.jpg?o=17

-Camouflage: silver pen

-Manifestation-
-Appearance:https://media.photobucket.com/image/ice%20maiden/perspective32-0/icemaiden.jpg?o=5

-Personality:Asagao is lovely like a flower,yet is silent and cold, she is calm in tough situations and sometimes merciful to enemies which is very rare yet if she is in a pleased mood or gives pity to the opponent then will heal him or her.When she is angered then she will be determined to destroy her target by all costs.Her silence makes her mysterious,her eyes are slightly hidden under the hood that she leaves up at all times.

-Inner World: A forest with trees that seem to touch the heavens,beautiful flowers blooming everywhere,and long grass plains that seem to be endless in the heart of the forest there is a cherry tree with Asagao standing in front of it.

-Connection:The blossoms from Ichisake's zanpakuto represents Asagao, beautiful,yet deadly.Yet they share the same desire. To help the ones they care about.

-Shikai-

-Release Phrase: Scatter your grace over the shadows Asagao!

-Shikai Appearance:https://media.photobucket.com/image/ice%20blade/devilfoxkaiorie/Dark%20relm/soulcalibur.jpg?o=2

Shikai abilitiy: 1,000 metal-like petals that can be used for defense purposes .Or she can turn them into Flower crests made from herbs that can be used for healing purposes,they move as fast as the wind carries leaves,and are guided by her sword or if her sword is out of reach she can use her spiritual energy to move them with the movements of her hand.

-Techniques:

Name:Chiyu Hana (healing flower)
Effect:Can heal allies or herself by allowing her petals to become a rose-like figure on the wound that is created from a herb that has healing properties that can heal gashes.
cooldown: Until the person is completely healed (takes 5 posts to heal the person completely)

Name: Kaben Maru (Petal circle)
effect:the petals join together and swarm in a circle around an ally or herself,and she can use this as a shield while the person is healing.
cooldown: 2 posts to recharge.

-Bankai-
[[Reserved for Captain class shinigami, unless it is trained for.]]

-Zanpakuto's full name:Amatsuotome Asagao!

-Bankai Appearance:https://media.photobucket.com/image/crystal%20blade/Angel_of_Light_and_Wind/Kingdom%20Hearts/The%20Yin%20Yang%20Sisters/Anzai%20Yin/Keyblades/Deadly-Rapture.jpg?o=22

-Bankai Ability: The petals develop stronger healing abilities, or form into cherry blossoms that act as a shield. the petals are moved the same way as the shikai she can either guide them with her blade or use her spiritual energy to guide them by hand.

Name:Sakura Barrier
Effect:Cherry blossoms form a cylinder-like barrier that stands 100 feet tall, around her or allies that are standing 5 feet away.It is strong enough to deflect Ceros,kido ,and elemental attacks *fire ball, wave of ice,lightning strikes ect.*
cooldown: 5 posts to recharge ( wind,void,and water attacks can't be blocked by this,and it can't block grand ray ceros and it cant block the kido spells past soren sokatsui)


Name: Matabi
effect: Petals form over allies or herself and form an temporary unbreakable shield while healing torn flesh and rejects any attack that is flung at the patient.
cooldown: 3 posts to recharge.



Name:Reiki
Effect: it acts as a back up healing method,if she or any of her allies lost a limb or is near death. the petals become herb-like and it attaches itself to the wounds and it begins to glow. The glowing continues until the limb has grown back. It can also cure mental illnesses that are caused by powerful illusions and can heal any poison.
Cooldown: 4 posts for patient to heal completely and 2 posts to recharge.

complete

Can you not use a code box?

You need a connection. How is your zan connected to you, why is it manifested the way it is?

[[Name:Chiyu Hana (healing flower)
Effect:Can heal allies or herself by using some of her ice blossoms to form a rose-like figure on the wound.
cooldown: Until the person is completely healed (5 posts).]]

This makes no sense. How does ice heal?

[[-Bankai Ability: Ice petals become ice/light made butterfly crests that is imprinted on that is imprinted on the enemy's skin. If the foe is struck twice, the enemy freezes in a block of ice.]]

Change it, it's a rip off of Soi Fon.

[[Name:Maru Sakura (dance of cherry blossoms)
Effect: a flower crest forms underneath the enemy,causing a wave of blossoms to appear from the ground,swirling together to become a blizzard with the foe trapped inside it causing him/her without the ability to see,hear,or sense spiritual energy
cooldown:3 posts]]
You'll need a charge time for the crest, giving them time to escape it

[[Name:Touketsu Bougyo
Effect: Blossoms have the ability to freeze any kido,or elemental based attacks.
cooldown: can only freeze one attack at a time]]

What does freezing the attack do? Is it weak against fire and heat? You need an actual cool down

its not really the ice that heals its the holy light that heals and as for the others i'll fix it

fixed

[[-Shikai Ability: Has the ability to create petals everywhere that can be used for attack purposes or gather together and becomes a barrier for defense.]]

How are you going to attack and defend with plain petals? Or are the petals like Byakuya's and made of metal? You'll need some limitation, and amount of petals that it can create.

[[Name:Chiyu Hana (healing flower)
Effect:Can heal allies or herself by using some of her blossoms to form a rose-like figure on the wound.
cooldown: Until the person is completely healed (5 posts at a time).]]
How exactly does it heal anything?

[[Name: Kaben Maru (Petal circle)
effect:the petals shatter and become one big blast.
cooldown: takes 2 posts to recharge.]]

What exactly does this mean? Do you meant that your petals shatter into a cero-like blast of reishi? In which case does it destroy all of your petals?

[[-Bankai Ability: The petals can turn into flower crests,rose thorns,or shatter into Dust-like particles that make it harder for the enemy to dodge her attack.]]

What's a flower crest? Do you control your petals with your mind or something? As for the Dust thing, unless it's a visible cloud of dust it won't fly, too easy to auto-hit.

[[-Techniques: Name:Maru Sakura (dance of cherry blossoms)
Effect: a flower crest forms underneath the enemy,causing a wave of blossoms to appear from the ground,swirling together around the foe trapping him/her inside it causing him/her without the ability to see,hear,or sense spiritual energy
cooldown:3 posts to recharge]]
Again, you need a charge time for this, to give them a chance to dodge. How does it block hearing and sensing reiatsu?

[[Name:Touketsu Bougyo
Effect: Blossoms shatter and have the ability to turn any kido or elemental attacks to blossoms.
cooldown: 5 posts at a time]]
So you sacrifice all of your petals to turn an attack to petals? Can you control the petals you convert them to? Also, you can't turn ANY kido or elemental attack, you need a limit.

fixed

and fixed lol

You didn't fix anything I asked you to

ok changed the abilities a bit

And i changed one of the techniques

[[Has the ability to create metal-like petals that are everywhere within 2 miles and that can be used for attack purposes or gather together and becomes a barrier for defense.Or she can turn them into Flower crests made from herbs that can be used for healing purposes or for poisoning the victim.]]

NO. First of all, you've got healing, defense, offense, and poison as well? Just no. Second, everywhere in two miles is so massively overpowered it's ridiculous, especially for shikai.

[[Name: Kaben Maru (Petal circle)
effect:the petals join together as one and attack all at once
cooldown: takes 2 posts at a time]]

So they surround the opponent and close in on them?

[[Name:Sakura Barrier
Effect:Cherry blossom Petals have the ability to break down any elemental attacks by making a barrier and breaking down the element with the petals inside the barrier causing the attack to have no affect.Or it can be used as a non-conducting shield. Ex: if lightning struck the barrier it wouldn't conduct.
cooldown: 5 posts at a time]]

This makes no sense at all, it's just you rambling on. How does it break down the elements? Where are the limitations to it?

[[Name: Matatabi
Effect: petals become part of the earth and grow to hold the enemies into place.
cooldown: 3 posts.]]

Again, explain how it works.

Also, if you want to have five techs I'll be taking away 100 of your points

what?! thats strange...........i could've sworn i changed that...........well what ever...i changed it again...and can i make one defense technique for my Bankai at least?

[[Name:Chiyu Hana (healing flower)
Effect:Can heal allies or herself by allowing her petals to become a rose-like figure on the wound that is created from a herb that has healing properties.
cooldown: Until the person is completely healed (5 posts at a time).]]

How quickly does it heal the wound, how severe can the wounds be, does it regenerate things like limbs?

As for your sakura barrier, what is the highest level attack it can defend against?

fixed

Cero? Kido spells? elemental attacks? That's about as non descriptive as before. Be more specific. What level of Cero can it block, what level of kido, Etc.

yeah thats what i pretty much figured....ok fixed is this more specific?

If you figured, why didn't you do it in the first place, Instead of wasting our time. Anywho, you'll need Aponi's final approval.

I assume that by saying that Yoshi means he'd approve it? If so you're approved, I trust his judgement.. If not, I can't really read it over until later

As our benevolant admin is currently busy, and i have some free time, i've decided to look over this zan in earnest.

Ichisake Hideyoshi wrote:

-General Info-

-Zanpakuto Name: Asagao

-Family: Nature/plants

-Type: Projectile
-Sealed Description:https://media.photobucket.com/image/katana/fbusmc/SANY2142.jpg?o=17

-Camouflage: silver pen

-Manifestation-
-Appearance:https://media.photobucket.com/image/ice%20maiden/perspective32-0/icemaiden.jpg?o=5

-Personality:Asagao is lovely like a flower,yet is silent and cold, she is calm in tough situations and sometimes merciful to enemies which is very rare.when she is angered then she will be determined to destroy her target by all costs.Her silence makes her mysterious,her eyes are slightly hidden under the hood that she leaves up at all times.

-Inner World: A forest with trees that seem to touch the heavens,beautiful flowers blooming everywhere,and long grass plains that seem to be endless in the heart of the forest there is a cherry tree with Asagao standing in front of it.

-Connection:The blossoms from Ichisake's zanpakuto represents Asagao, beautiful,yet deadly.

-Shikai-

-Release Phrase: Scatter your grace over the shadows Asagao!

-Shikai Appearance:https://media.photobucket.com/image/ice%20blade/devilfoxkaiorie/Dark%20relm/soulcalibur.jpg?o=2

-Shikai Ability: Has the ability to create metal-like petals that are gently swirling around the area where she stands and that can be used for attack purposes.Or she can turn them into Flower crests made from herbs that can be used for healing purposes.

How many metal like petals can it create? How fast do they move? Do they require any sort of movement from you to guide them?

-Techniques:

Name:Chiyu Hana (healing flower)
Effect:Can heal allies or herself by allowing her petals to become a rose-like figure on the wound that is created from a herb that has healing properties that can heal broken limbs,Severe gashes that causes blood loss ,and poisoned gashes.
cooldown: Until the person is completely healed (takes 5 posts to heal the person completely)
I assume this is the part of your ability that is "Turning petals into flower crests" If so, remove it from your ability.

Name: Kaben Maru (Petal circle)
effect:the petals join together and swarm a circle at the tip of her blade and they shoot at the enemy all at once.
cooldown: takes 2 posts at a time
Your cooldown is unclear. 2 posts to charge, or 2 posts to cooldown?

-Bankai-
[[Reserved for Captain class shinigami, unless it is trained for.]]

-Zanpakuto's full name:Amatsuotome Asagao.

-Bankai Appearance:https://media.photobucket.com/image/crystal%20blade/Angel_of_Light_and_Wind/Kingdom%20Hearts/The%20Yin%20Yang%20Sisters/Anzai%20Yin/Keyblades/Deadly-Rapture.jpg?o=22

-Bankai Ability: The petals can turn into multiple blades,rose thorns, or form into cherry blossoms that act as a shield
Same as shikai. Amount, speed, Etc. Also, is there a limit to how many blades it can form? I also fail to see how rose thorns are useful in any way. They'd be smaller then the petals actually.

Name:Sakura Barrier
Effect:Cherry blossoms form a cylinder-like barrier that stands 100 feet tall, around her or allies that are standing 5 feet away.It is strong enough to deflect Ceros,kido ,and elemental attacks *fire ball, wave of ice,lightning strikes ect.*
cooldown: 5 posts at a time ( wind,void,and water attacks can't be blocked by this,and it can't block grand ray ceros and it cant block the kido spells past soren sokatsui)
Again, your cooldown is unclear. Does it last for 5 posts? Does it take 5 posts to charge? does it take 5 posts to use again?


Name: Matatabi
Effect: The petals form into 20 blades and can either be shot at the enemy,or if the attack is deflected,it turns back into its petal form and counter attacks.
cooldown: 6 posts at a time.
Cooldowns again. This also seems like a rather offensive ability for the fourth division captain's Zan, but that's just personal opinion.

good point on the rose thorn technique.......ok changed that and fixed the cooldowns and sorry if i'm being bothersome

No worries. Just sorry we couldn't get you approved faster.